Category: If I Could Rewrite

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If I Could Rewrite: Star Wars: The Last Jedi

Posted on by Annie Simm

Creating new work is hard, but editing is easier. Today we’re tackling Star Wars: The Last Jedi. This is a continuation of changes I made in The Force Awakens post here and here.

Finally, I’m on to the second movie in this trilogy. Honestly, I wasn’t sure if I would do these last two movies because I felt like they needed a lot of rewriting, and I’m trying to avoid turning this into fanfiction.

More on that later.

I think the biggest problem this movie had was conflicting themes. Multiple characters have to recognize the universe is full of grey morality, but the film ends by doubling down on the world’s black and white. For some reason, the Finn/Rose introduces themes of anti-capitalism before abandoning that with a warning about the cycles of violence/hate. Poe’s story is the most consistent with a message about not being reckless, but it weirdly focuses on Poe’s lack of faith.

This time I will try fitting the characters and plot rewrites in one post because fewer new characters need extensive changes.

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If I Could Rewrite: Star Wars: The Force Awakens: The Plot

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Finally, it’s here! (Sorry, this took so long. I was using No Bones Days as an excuse to procrastinate.)

I’m gonna go into this post assuming that you read the “characters” post. If not, go and do that now.

…Did you do it? You promise? Okay then, let’s get into it.

Alright, on to part two of this series! This is a continuation of the stuff I did in the Character post. Meaning that any concrete decisions I made for the characters still apply here even if I didn’t mention them again. I gonna try not to repeat stuff without adding anything new.

As I said before, I think the movie had the right idea, but the execution is off. These are just the changes I think would help.

Buckle up! It’s a long one.

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If I Could Rewrite: Star Wars: The Force Awakens: Characters

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(Spoilers for the entire Star Wars Sequel trilogy. I will need to discuss future movies to explain some of my choices.)

Creating new work is hard, but editing is easier. Today we’re tackling Star Wars: The Force Awakens.

I agree wholeheartedly with the popular consensus that these movies weren’t the best. I think the main problem with them was the presentation. The creators had plenty of cool ideas and concepts they wanted to explore, but their delivery was just a bit off. The movies feel half-baked and the characters under-developed as a result.

In this post, I will focus on changing some characters’ introductions/presentations to better fit the story’s overall themes. I plan on doing another post where I edit the events of the plot to make it flow better.

I haven’t decided yet if I’m going to do the entire sequel trilogy or just this movie. If I tackle the other movies, the decisions I make in this post will carry over to those.

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An Unofficial If I Could Rewrite: A Runaway Character

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(Spoilers for JoJo’s Bizarre Adventure parts 3, 4, and 6.)

When watching Jojo’s Bizarre Adventure: Stardust Crusaders, a couple of things stuck out to me as weird. And I don’t mean in the standard JoJo’s way either. The narrative flow is what seemed a bit off to me.

Avdol’s double death was odd, the focus on Polnareff over Jotaro seemed out of place, and in all honesty, some people’s Stand changed abilities partway through the story. (I’m looking at you, Hermit Purple.) But for me, the most bizarre in about Stardust Crusaders is Anne, The Runaway Girl, who leaves, returns, and leaves again.

I believe it is likely that this part of Jojo’s had its beginning and ending planned, but the middle was whatever Araki came up with along the way. That’s not necessarily a bad thing, but it led to the weirdness I mentioned earlier. Araki probably just wanted to use her and couldn’t think of a way to make her relevant, so he wrote her out.

In this post, I want to throw out a couple of ideas for how Anne could have been vital to Stardust Crusaders instead of a bizarre footnote. (I promise I’ll stop using this pun.)

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If I Could Rewrite: Harry Potter

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New series alert!🎉

It’s hard to write. No one is discounting that. Editing an existing work, however, is a much less daunting task. It’s so easy, in fact, that I do it all the time without thinking about it, so I decided to start a series where I actually put some effort into it. If I could rewrite Harry Potter, this is what I would do.

To start off, my actual plan for this was to do a deep dive into each arc of the series, but with 7 books to the series, ain’t nobody got time for that. Soooo, instead, I’m just going to change my main grievance with the Harry Potter series.

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